Love vs Fate: My first 55 Fiction.

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On a full moon day,Tracy was waiting for him...................her love.
.............some one knocked....her heart skipped a beat..............there he stood, so handsome!

Both stood in silence, staring..........Suddenly a cloud shifted and the moon was shown as magnificent as ever..........He started transforming..........and........unexpectedly he bit her!

He was a werewolf!

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    1. Yeah very scary! Raat me uth kar mat baeth jana! Ha ha!

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  2. Wow, didn't quite expected this ending :-D Surprised :-D

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  3. Ah, you know what....i wrote a very similar short story (though it was not a 55 fiction, but a proper short story) which had this kind of setting and climax...slightly different, but quite similar...... so, u made me nostalgic :)

    PS- You can read that story. It's there in my blog titled 'The werewolf' :))

    PPS- Your first attempt at this genre is very impressive. One suggestion. There is no need to put that last line 'he was a werewolf'. Let the reader make his own interpretation.

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  4. nice attempt ,, but cud have been better :)

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    1. Thanks:) Got me irritated u know! Never really used to this short a story!

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  5. Good attempt dear! Nicely penned

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  6. Surprise.. and well written.. :-)

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  7. A wonderful piece of heart attack to a romantic plot...werewolf...!!!

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  8. Ewww...I could almost hear the scream.... Enjoyed, Bushra!

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    1. ThanQ Panchaliji:) Welcome to my blog!

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  9. Your lines are simply awesome.....

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  10. Oh! The twilight saga! Surprising indeed!

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  11. A pretty good attempt Bushra.. you managed to convey the atmosphere, the character's feelings, the setting of the story very well. Just a suggestion - the twist was clear before the last line itself. Since 55-fiction has a strict word limit, you could use those extra 3-4 words that you get to add something more to the story.

    Enjoyed reading this one :)

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    1. Thank you for the advice Mixi dear:) Will keep your suggestion in mind the next time:)

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  12. A good attempt....didn't expect the ending :)

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  13. Wow! That's a neat story in just 55 words. But I guess you do uses a lot of ellipses.

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