'Held up by fate' ~55 fiction

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His heart filled with joy as he waited near the same fence.He groped for the ring in his pocket-today he would confess! There she was,as beautiful as ever!
But she was not alone...a tear trickled down his eye as someone else kissed those cheeks he had loved all these ten years...


~Bushra
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46 comments

  1. Ohhhh i feel sad weh one doesnt get his or her love :( Very pretty write up Querida :)
    Btw tht ring reminds me of the ring in Lord of the rings :D

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    1. :( sad indeed.
      Thank you sweety :X and yes it's the same ring :D

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  2. aaawwww.... that's depressing and sad...

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  3. A romantic and painful story told in just 55 words. Nice one bushra

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    1. Thanks Ritesh the 55er ka Guru! :)

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  4. An entire story in 55 words:) Well done!

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  5. Ah, heartbreaking ending! tch..tch..

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  6. such a sad story but beautifully told in just 55 words... well done

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  7. Less of words more of action! That's what I believe in too...
    Cheers! :)
    55 is a magical figure though!

    Sammya
    http://www.deckleedge.info/

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    1. Yes it's indeed magical! :)
      cheers to you too :)

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  8. Very nice one Bushra! But I believe that is the ring which comes in the Lord of the rings Trilogy, isn't ?

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  9. heart rending writeup .. well written .. liked it from the core of my heart !

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    1. Aww! That's so sweet...thank you Ankur :D

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    1. :) Thank you and welcome to my blog :)

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  11. All said n felt in 55! Good one!

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  12. Better never when too late :)
    poignant and beautiful !!!

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  13. Oh, no. Such stories can't be so short!

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  14. to cuddle up a big long story into 55 words is not so easy.. you handled it well..

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  15. Well crafted Bushra - one of the rare 55ers that seem complete and not labored.

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  16. Ah! Heart-breaking. It's always good to confess/propose in time.

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  18. :(

    Why did he wait for so many years.. stupid guy :x :(

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